So I started writing this story so can you please tell me what you think? Yeah, I'm only 11....

Vanessa watched as the grumbles ran past her. She stayed unnoticed by the small dwarf like creatures. Where was she supposed to go? How was she supposed to survive in this place? She barely understood it, barely knew the creatures of this world, and barely even knew how she had made it through all this time! Vanessa wiped the sweat off her forehead, hoping she didn’t smell like…human? The demonic creatures would smell her “scent” and hunt her down. She’d be dead meat. Vanessa searched the dusty floor of the forest, looking for a pile of mud. Finally she spotted one, down by the stream. Unfortunately to reach the mud, she would have to pass by the trail. The bare, empty trail. Where almost every creature of this world could see her. Vanessa sighed and crawled along the edges of the bushes, hoping not to disrupt them. Vanessa had to watch her step, if she stepped on a root of the bushes, they would complain and the whole forest would hear this and…who knows what would happen. Something bad was all she knew. She had reached the trail. The bare trail that sent shivers down her spine. Vanessa looked both ways, as if she were about to cross a road. Nobody, nothing was there, watching her. Vanessa took a deep breath and raced through the trail, her hair flying back as she ran across the forest floor. Vanessa dove into the stream, knowing that it would be silent. Of all the living nature “things” in this world, Vanessa liked the stream the best. They seemed to always keep quiet and were so gentle, unlike their cousins, oceans, seas, and rapids. Bubbles burst out of Vanessa’s mouth as she held her breath underneath water. Suddenly she heard giggles, they echoed in her ears, faintly at first but became louder and louder. She swung her head, hoping to shake the tiny, silvery fish that were swimming about her ear out. Vanessa burst out of the water, gasping for air, panting. She looked about, had anybody or anything heard her? Did they see her? Vanessa stared at the bushes, dazed. Her hair was wet and dripping onto her face, half of her body was still in the water the rest was soaked. Then it came to her. The reason she had come all this way, without backing down. She was here to find her sister and best friends. They had all come to this world together, but they had been separated. Vanessa shuddered at the memory of her and her sister and friends lost in the woods, fighting over which way to go, cold, hungry and desperate. Where were they now? She had no clue, but she was certain that they were still alive. She had no clue who she was following, but she knew it was someone she knew. Someone who had been with her when they had been exposed to this world. She had found the bracelet she had given to everyone close to her on the ground a few days before. This was her only evidence of someone she knew was along this trail. Hopefully she wasn’t on the wrong one…